Wow. What can I say? The emotional ups and downs of this story, the excellent in-character portrayals, the twists and turns of the plot... each facet of this gem of a story contributed to the overall beauty of this piece of very original fiction. Piece of art, dare I say. It brought me to tears, the wonderful phrasing of the particular line in which Dally turns Hiei's cum into water. The symbolism is subtle yet potent, forcing the reader to think on a whole new level and re-asses his or her ideas of transformations, especially those of a sexual nature. You are a gifted author, and the poetry of Dumbledore trying to finger Edward and Draco will live on in my mind as a paralell with the works of such great writers as Hemmingway and Frost.
Please, continue this story. In fact, submit it for publishing. Send it to JK Rowling and/or Stephenie Meyer. It would make my heart happy to know that this beautiful art is getting the appreciation it truly deserves.